Lili that was an absolutely amazing blog, it was pleasure to read. It was so vivid and authentic, you have a great narrative voice in your writing. Your use of short concise sentences make it easy to read yet carry allot of meaning. I like how you didn’t get caught up on one aspect of the train ride, rather a variety of aspects. You begin with an awesome sort of introduction where you personify the train itself and then give various descriptions of all the things around you. What was also most relatable was the joy you portray in people watching and the pleasure of appreciating the simplicities in other peoples lives.
You brought a simple train ride to life, I literally felt like I was on a Sydney train when reading!
Keep up the great work 😀
My peer review of Lili Braidners 5th blog. Awesome blog, so authentic and vivid, it was a real pleasure to read.
ENGL 204 - Jesse Owad 